Walht: show not tell in our writing
Little children's smiles reached 100 miles far. Their piercing cheerful screams were heard from far as possible. There little active legs taking them wherever needed as fast as 2 seconds, like being injected with a adrenaline. There noses sniffed and sniffed like dogs saying hello to their own species. Their eyes big and bulging searching for as much delicious food. The noise of the bouncy castle just repeatedly went BOYING, BOYING, BOYING….
The parents sipping on their wine like cats licking water out of a bowl. The birthday boys goofy face scrunched up as his mouth opened as wide as the sun. The loads of presents were huge just like the biggest mountain on earth, Mount Everest.The birthday boy was as happy as anybody could be. After shredding every present, he gracefully shared his presents with other children. His favourite was the accurate Nerf gun that he got from my dad. He was warned not to shoot or aim at anybody. All of a sudden bullets were shot everywhere and one was shot right into another child's eye. His tears dripped down his face like a lake.
Every parent was there to comfort him in so much ways. After him sulking the parents finally fixed him up and put him to sleep. Eventually he got up and played like the healthiest person alive. Once he was up the birthday boy was not allowed to play with the present when he is around people. Everyone was back to their partying mood.
As the sun slowly settled people finally started to decline with a great smile on their faces. In my opinion this would be the best birthday I have ever been to.
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